- Places that need more clarification
- Places where you've overexplained instead of trusting the reader to get it
- Problems with pacing
- Failure to maintain tension in a scene
- Passages where your voice shines through (so you can deliberately add more of these)
- Telling vs. showing
- Choppy transitions
- Questions about character motivation and whether their actions fit the situation
Chris Eboch's critique of my novel opening is up on her blog, Write Like a Pro! Chris is the author of the Haunted series--delightfully spooky paranormal novels for middle grade readers. Check out her thoughtful comments. You can also submit the first 300 words of your own novel to Chris to win a free critique.
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