Ruth Donnelly, middle grade author
Wow, I LOVE this! Go you!
LOVE! Don't change anything! I teach middle school and this would definitely suck in young readers if it was on the book jacket!
I agree with Kristen. It's frickin good!I'm in the contest too!
I agree - I think this is fantastic ^_^ Great job and good luck!
It sounds fun and sweet and a bit adventurous. Love it!
Wow! I love it! I wouldn't change a word, and I've only said that once before in my comments on people's pitches. This one is a keeper.
I think this is really great!1 I think that you can put the 11 may be at the start...Eleven-year-old Eleanor
Adorable. Love it! Keep it!
Yes, great job. Character, conflict, quest. Bravo!
Fabulous! sounds like a great MS! All the best.
This is great! My son would love to read this book. I wouldn't change anything either. I want to know how her dog got lost. But I guess I will have to read the book to find out. Nice job!
That looks great! Conflict, character and voice, all in 140 characters. Nice!
AWESOME pitch. Great job. Kids will love it.
smart, funny, and playful this pitch is super work! i can't believe i am saying this, but i almost wish i was 11 again so i could read this and discover the books magic from an innocent agedouglas esper
Great! Nice job getting it all neatly into one little package.
I love that even the names contribute to the voice. Great job!
Thanks, everyone, for the lovely, encouraging comments! One thing's certain, the kid lit community is the nicest bunch of people anywhere. ;)
Great job! I really like this pitch. I wouldn't change anything. Good luck with the contest!
Impressive - you crammed a lot of fun details into that 140 characters! A reluctant camper, shapeshifting, even her dog's name. I think it's good to go!
Fantastic job. You are definitely good to go with this one.
Rats! I love this pitch, but I just checked it and it's 23 characters too long! Yipes!
How about? Reluctant camper Eleanor knows it’s dangerous to experiment with shapeshifting-but if she wants to find her lost dog, she has no choice.
It is really cute, but I don't think you need the "reluctant camper" because it isn't referred to in the rest of the pitch. This sounds really fun. Good luck in the contest!
Thanks Suzi! I checked it using the character count feature in Word, and it came up with 137. Apparently it doesn't count spaces! I'll rework it. I'm glad you caught that--I'd hate to be disqualified. JEFritz, I will probably omit that part. I liked it b/c it conveyed the setting (summer camp), but you're right, it's not necessary. Thanks for the suggestion.
I love this pitch. It's fantastic. You've really got me interested.
Two thumbs up.
I wouldn't change a thing about this. It's perfect. Good luck.(In MSWord go to review and under "thesaurus" is a little icon with abc(123). Highlight your sentence and click that icon and you get character and word count. They even give you character count without spaces)
I like it a lot! Good work and Good luck!
Thanks for the tip, fOIS In The City. I found an online counter, and it and MSWord got the same total--that's reassuring. :)Online counter:http://www.lettercount.com/
WOW, love this! The first was great, so when I saw you had to shorten it for the contest I was worried it would lose something . . . actually it made it even better! You are really good at this . . . hmm, maybe I should have you give me my log line, ha!Good luck :-)
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